a taste of cowrie shell

March 17, 2008 at 6:57 pm | Posted in poetry, writing | 15 Comments
Tags: , , ,

he only heard a breath
exu, she said,
tracing the line of his shoulders,

Advertisements

15 Comments »

RSS feed for comments on this post. TrackBack URI

  1. i will suffer the excruciating pain of leaving a comment for this (the things I have to do)……beautiful, seductive….ditto Jo.

  2. in three lines, I can see it perfectly

  3. Simple & suggestive. Well done.

  4. The least mention of cowrie makes me want to puka. heh heh heh

  5. notice ~ concise art=concise comments
    (((shh)))

  6. Scot, four lines.

  7. Thanks everybody, tiny things like these are so easy to slide past,

  8. see, told ya.

    Goner.

  9. It’s very pleasant you found such a short but powerful word, you’ve used exu in another poem I’ve read… echoing another poster, though, concise poetry = concise ambitions, I hope.

    Waiting for something with less japan and more meat. Good flash, though.

  10. yes, in so few words, yes.

    I am making a place where you can send a root to taste different soil. I am tending this earth as we speak. Wait for me?

    miss you.

  11. I love how you end it on a comma.

  12. i like the comma at the end too signifying more to come!

  13. sometimes, in fact many times, the least number of words are most mind-blowing.

  14. thanks everybody, Amuirin, you might have been the only one to put the two together, Hydra Helix, helloooooo, where have you been and where are you know? hurry hurry, i can’t wait,

  15. So what did she find………….?


Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

Blog at WordPress.com.
Entries and comments feeds.

%d bloggers like this: