Comments on: Tom’s new spectacles

By: Gabrielle Bryden

Gabrielle Bryden — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 23:33:26 +0000

Well you really are a magician! It’s great to get some further details about the poem from the author. This is the type of stuff that students will be discussing when your poetry is on the national curriculum for schools and universities. That w/- is pure genius. When I looked at it I saw a sail in the wind, which created a natural pause in the text – but your little map just adds a whole new dimension to it. The sail was like a drunk person trying to get to the bar but leaning (in to the wind, so to speak). Just another thing – I think all poetry is essentially non-linear if it contains metaphor, simile, allusion, symbols and imagery.

By: Aletha

Aletha — Thu, 12 Nov 2009 01:01:49 +0000

Were you crossing the bar where the drinks are served, or the bar where poetic lines diverge, or the bar of the music that separates jazz from the rest. It don’t mean a thing, you know, without it.

Wonderfully light tempo, am humming the tune now.
Coool,

By: Simonne

Simonne — Mon, 09 Nov 2009 11:02:37 +0000

Very cool. ‘licked its tongue
into the corners of the evening’ is awesome.
Awesome, full of awe? Only if handsome is full of hand.

By: Sumedh Prasad

Sumedh Prasad — Mon, 09 Nov 2009 08:12:13 +0000

Ah, Eliot.
I had the theme from Love Story playing in the background as I read this, and the combination was almost surreal!
That would indeed be surreal, my friend, sorry. The garden is looking absolutely gorgeous.

By: Jen Jewel Brown

Jen Jewel Brown — Sun, 08 Nov 2009 23:49:15 +0000

Loving it. Reminds me so much of Johnny Green Room, Carlton, early 70′s. So alive Paul. So alive. xJen
Thanks, Jen. I bet that was a fantastic room, Carlton, early 70′s. And we are both still so alive! Amazing.

By: Ana

Ana — Sun, 08 Nov 2009 20:56:59 +0000

hmmm, and the guy’s first name is also Thomas (Tom, T.)

But than there are lots and lots of Toms out there, and I was only told ones that the subjects one can write about are few -for after all the truth is simple. It is just that each new interpretation is unique (and yours also beautiful) – for it is the world that is complex.
If the truth is simple but the world is complex…hmm that is a bit of a mind bogglement, Ana. As is the fact that a spectacle is something you look at but spectacles are something you look through.