exquisite corpse of the sun

March 27, 2009 at 7:14 pm | Posted in poetry, writing | 11 Comments
Tags: exquisite corpse, poetry, Tipota

Melt the length of a moment in focalfire containment
internal this kaleidoscope swirl rare birds
dolphinheaded mermaids on invisible wavelength
wings away and curls above, brings rain
created in random pattern on precision paths
of cranium unique, magnificent, containing uni
verse and multiverse, leaving rhythmic
beat impressions on bananable being obvious
unimaged, itself and nothing more. Urns
roll along the highway spilling dusty bones
from the past solitude, the study of the sun.

(an exquisite corpse is a form of collaboration. I did this one with Tipota.)

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OH, I really like this. I love the urns spilling the dusty bones, exquisite! In flight from past loneliness…yes. Very nice.
Thanks FG.

Comment by fgfranklin— March 28, 2009 #
the results paint a picture of the universe coalescing out of the Big Bang, cooling and spreading into galaxies whose structure was determined by sound waves reverberating in the cosmic fireball.
Mariana, you have an amazing brain.

Comment by Mariana— March 28, 2009 #
are you good at music? your writing always makes me think of music.
I tried to learn the piano, Vesper, but my fingers are too used to typing to learn new skills. I do love music though.

Comment by vesper de vil— March 28, 2009 #
“Containing uni
verse and multiverse,”…

Beautiful. Even the line break says so much.
Thankyou, Thomma Lyn.

Comment by Thomma Lyn— March 28, 2009 #
Interesting juxtaposition…

Starts with flashes of light and leads to…lonely death.
That’s the thing with these collaborations, Crushed. No one can control them, a third force is created by the interaction of the two minds.

Comment by crushedsghost— March 29, 2009 #
Any friend of Henry Miller is a friend of mine.
Noah! That’s an interesting reference. You’ll have to explain it to me though. I’ve read some Henry Miller but not a lot. Is he in here somewhere? Maybe Tipota snuck him in.

Comment by breathenoah— March 29, 2009 #
A tasty collaboration, an exquisite study…the words are beaming!
Cool, beaming and radiating,

Comment by hayat— March 30, 2009 #
Very beautiful and powerful! Kudos to you and Tipota Paul !!
Thankyou, Ms Mist.

Comment by Mental Mist— March 30, 2009 #
What a wonderful poem, wonderful synergy, you and Tipota work well together. I loved the musical alliteration, but the title is a killer: exquisite, indeed. And “bananable being” gave me the chills!
Thankyou, Harmonie.

Comment by harmonie22— March 30, 2009 #
But Paul, it’s your reference that I linked to Henry Miller! More literally, your hyper-link to Wikipedia!
Oh, I see. Henry Miller was an exquisite corpser too.

Comment by breathenoah— March 30, 2009 #
emphatically

Comment by Melissa Davis— April 26, 2011 #